Can anyone proofread my essay?

Updated on July 25, 2016 in Homework Help
4 on July 25, 2016

I have an essay about same sex marriage and aint sure if my grammar is ok. Please be honest but not rude. Just a few sentences:
Gay marriage should be legalized because it is inhuman and uncivilized. Our constitution give us many rights and liberties. And one of the basic freedoms is pursuit of happiness which gay people have not. They cannot marry people they are in love with and it makes them unhappy. We violate their freedoms and liberties. Why others can choose who maries who and these pepel who want to start a family are sufferings.
Thnx in advance for taking your time!=)

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0 on July 25, 2016

C’mon do your own homework. If we correct your mistakes, you won’t develop any useful skills.

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0 on July 25, 2016

Here’s what I’d recommend you:

Gay marriage should be legalized because banning it is inhuman and uncivilized. Our Constitution gives us many rights and liberties. One of the basic freedoms is the pursuit of happiness of which gay people are deprived. They cannot marry people they are in love with, and it makes them unhappy. This ban violates their freedoms and liberties. While others can choose whom they want to marry, same sex couples suffer.

And don’t forget to include a strong thesis statement in your essay:
https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/545/1/

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0 on July 25, 2016

I dunno I like your essay as it is. Add me as friend on this community and I will add you too.

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0 on July 25, 2016

Doesn’t Word underline all those typos? First, you should check it using some online software. Have you ever tried grammarly.com – an online grammar checker? It might help.

Some more resources that give useful advice on proofreading:

https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/561/01/
http://writingcenter.unc.edu/handouts/editing-and-proofreading/

Good luck with your essay and have a nice day!

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