Could you please proofread my essay about Deborah Tannen?
Hello, I have this critical analysis paper due later this week. I was wondering if anybody could proofread it and see if there is something wrong with this. My paper is 644 words long, so its average for an essay. I would really appreciate for any help.
Thanks for taking your time to help me!
Deborah Tannen is a linguist, which researched the mother-daughter relationship. Tannen has spent time researching this topic by interviewing individuals and reading about it. She gathered all of her information, and wrote an a piece named “Oh, Mom. Oh, Honey.: Why Do You Have to Say That?” . Her mission of this article is demonstrate her scientific findings to a general audience so they can understand how her findings apply to people’s real lives.
Tannen uses lots of dialog from the interviews she conducted before writing the essay. Primary source is great when it comes to essays with lots of information, and Tannen uses that to her advantage. The reader may be able to relate to some of these conversations, if the reader is a female that is. The dialogs supports her view on mother-daughter relationships.
This writing is lengthy, about 2,500 words or less, but it is a piece is based from her Tannen’s book: “You’re Wearing That? Understanding Mothers and Daughters in Conversation.” In the 2000 words, Tannen talks about a numerous amount of things. Early in the paper she states that her mother passed away while working on this paper. A quarter into the essay, she uses ethos and lets the reader know that she is a linguist.
Tannen organized this paper fairly. She first explained researching the topic during the death of her mother. Afterwards, she then just started explaining all of the information that she had gathered. Her writing style was back and forth with narrative and dialog. That keeps a little more interesting. What was really effective was her ability to use her dialogs as examples towards her viewpoint on the relationships. For everything she stated, Tannen had her conversations to confirm, and that is always impressive. Everybody likes to have information given to them clearly.
As said earlier in this analysis, Tannen’s purpose was to inform, yet her method of organizing this paper was not setup as good as it should have been. Yes, the amount of dialog makes the paper interesting, but it does not always help the reader learn more on this topic. As stated earlier, the dialog does in fact help confirm the information, but some of it could have been left out.
It seems like this paper was initially written for women who may have had an interest in this topic due to them being able to relate; however, this piece has seem to grab the attention of all genders. Men do not relate with a mother-daughter relationship, even Tannen states so with the following: “…there is a special intensity to the mother-daughter relationship because talk — particularly talk about personal topics — plays a larger and more complex role in girls’ and women’s social lives than in boys’ and men’s.” The idea that men cannot relate to this topic may seem hopeless for them to find this interesting, yet Tannen successfully does the impossible.
What readers will love about this piece, is that Tannen is not bias towards the mother, nor the daughter side of the relationship. This gives the reader ability to decide on their own to see which part of the relationship makes it so unique. Tannen makes a great point explaining how each side finds the other difficult. This informs the reader what she intended to release to the public after her research.
Overall Tannen successfully achieved her goal to inform her readers about the mother- daughter relationship.She did it in an interesting way, as well as an informational manner. Understanding that this is only a small fraction of her book, this would be considered a long essay. The only flaw was the amount of dialog, but other than that this paper was greatly full of information and entertaining.
Update:
Sorry but my format did not copy correctly onto the site. It may be a bit hard to read.
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Deborah Tannen is a linguist who researched the mother-daughter relationship. Tannen researched this topic by interviewing individuals and reading about the subject. She gathered all of her research, and wrote a piece named “Oh, Mom. Oh, Honey: Why Do You Have to Say That?” The purpose of her article was to introduce her findings to a general audience, so people could understand how they apply to their everyday lives.
Tannen used a lot of dialog from the interviews she conducted in the essay. Primary sources are important when it comes to essays with lots of information, and Tannen used that to her advantage. Readers, particularly female readers, will be able to relate to many of these conversations. The dialogs she uses support her views on mother-daughter relationships.
The writing is lengthy, about 2,500 words, and it is based on a piece from her book: “You’re Wearing That? Understanding Mothers and Daughters in Conversation.” In the 2,500 words, Tannen talks about a numerous things. Early in the paper she states that her mother passed away while working on this paper. A quarter into the essay, she uses [[ethos? ethos means “culture” / “philosophy”, is this what you mean?]] and lets the reader know that she is a linguist.
Tannen organized her article well. She first explained her experience of researching the topic during the death of her mother. Then, she detailed all the information that she had gathered. Her writing style moves back and forth between narrative and dialog. That makes the topic a little more interesting. She was very effective at using the dialogs as examples to strengthen her viewpoint on mother-daughter relationships. For everything theory she proposed, Tannen impressively used a conversation to support and clarify it.
As stated earlier in this analysis, Tannen’s purpose was to inform, yet her method of organizing her paper was not done as well as it could have been. The usage of dialog makes her paper interesting, but it does not always help the reader learn more about the topic. While the dialog does help support her theories, some of it could have been left out.
It appears her paper was initially written for women who may have had an interest in this topic. However, this piece seems to grab the attention of all genders. Men are not directly part of a mother-daughter relationship, and Tannen even states this:
“…there is a special intensity to the mother-daughter relationship because talk — particularly talk about personal topics — plays a larger and more complex role in girls’ and women’s social lives than in boys’ and men’s.”
But the idea that men cannot relate to this topic and would not find it interesting is false, and Tannen successfully engages readers of both genders.
What readers will love about this piece is that Tannen is not biased towards either the mother’s or the daughter’s side of the relationship. This gives the reader the opportunity to decide on their own which parts of the relationship makes it so unique. Tannen makes some great points explaining how both sides finds the other difficult. Informing the reader in this way was her intent when she released her research to the public.
Overall Tannen successfully achieved her goal to inform her readers about the mother-daughter relationship. She did it in an interesting and informational manner. Understanding that this is only a small fraction of her book, it can be considered a long essay. The only flaw in the article was the amount of dialog, but other than that it was full of great information and very entertaining.
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Deborah Tannen is a linguist, which researched the mother-daughter relationship. She has spent time researching this topic by interviewing individuals and reading about it. Tannen gathered all of her information, and wrote an a piece named “Oh, Mom. Oh, Honey.: Why Do You Have to Say That?” . Her mission of this article is demonstrating her scientific findings to a general audience. Therefore they can understand how her findings apply to people’s real lives.
Tannen used lots of dialog from the interviews she conducted before writing the essay. Primary source is valuable when it comes to essays with lots of information, and Tannen uses that to support her advantage. The reader may be able to relate to some of these conversations, if the reader is a female that is. The dialogue supports her view on mother-daughter relationships.
This writing is lengthy, about 2,500 words or less, but it is a piece is based on her Tannen’s book: “You’re Wearing That? Understanding Mothers and Daughters in Conversation.” In the 2000 words, Tannen talks about a numerous amount of things. Early in the paper, she states that her mother passed away while working on this paper. A quarter into the essay, she uses ethos and lets the reader know that she is a linguist.
Tannen organized this paper fairly. She first explained researching the topic during the death of her mother. Afterwards, she then just started explaining all of the information that she had gathered. Her writing style was back and forth with narrative and dialog. That keeps a little more interesting. What was exceptionally helpful was her ability to use her dialogs as examples towards her viewpoint on the relationships. For everything she stated, Tannen had her conversations to confirm, and that is always impressive. Everybody likes to have information given to them clearly.
As said earlier in this analysis. Tannen’s purpose was to inform. Yet her method of organizing this paper was not setup as good as it should have been. Yes, the amount of dialog makes the paper interesting, but it does not always help the reader learn more about this topic. As stated earlier, the dialog does in fact help confirm the information, but some of it could have been left out.
It seems like this paper was initially written for women who may have had an interest in this topic due to them being able to relate; however, this piece has to seem to grab the attention of all genders. Men do not relate with a mother-daughter relationship, even Tannen states so with the following: “…there is a special intensity to the mother-daughter relationship because talk — particularly talk about personal topics — plays a larger and more complex role in girls’ and women’s social lives than in boys’ and men’s.” The idea that men cannot relate to this topic may seem hopeless for them to find this interesting, yet Tannen successfully does the impossible.
What readers will love about this piece, is that Tannen is not bias towards the mother, nor the daughter side of the relationship. This gives the reader ability to decide on their own to see which part of the relationship makes it so unique. Tannen makes a great point explaining how each side finds the other difficult. This informs the reader what she intended to release to the public after her research.
Overall Tannen successfully achieved her goal to inform her readers about the mother- daughter relationship.She did it in an interesting way, as well as an informational manner. Understanding that this is only a small fraction of her book, this would be considered a long essay. The only flaw was the amount of dialog, but other than that this paper was greatly occupied of information and entertaining.
Few corrections on grammar and vocabulary.